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Elder Dragon
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bow your heads
these are the times for remorse in the game of life we will all be ended but then why be here, of course we wouldnt be here for it either i cannot tell how much weve fought really i know some do neither im so lost in these thoughts i cant fel who is real ever able to feel no longer i can stand how we all can die in this world of life and play its so depressing how everyone is just bleeding never feeling thank you for al comments i need criticism of course be brutal |
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vincent darkheart- it's nice, I like it. Just perhaps concider the rhythm, and beats per line. Heh.. I always say that don't I?!
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Elder Dragon
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thank you very much
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Nice poem...
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Elder Dragon
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again thank you
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