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Chakahlah
10-24-2005, 03:32 AM
Hey everyone, this is a poem I wrote when I was feeling a little depressed. Please tell what you think.
Chakahlah
10-24-2005, 03:57 AM
What happened???:( :mad:
:) Oh, well. I guess I should just type it up here, huh?
Alone
I?m all alone, just me and the stars.
I close my eyes for a moment.
What?s this I see? A dragon? Or a winged serpent?
It?s coming closer.
?Help!? it calls. ?I need help!?
?I can help!? I hear myself call.
The winged creature lands beside me,
eyes filled with appreciation.
I cure her ailments and she offers me a ride.
I clamour onto her back and off we go.
My heart is bursting, and my mind is joyful,
I feel as if I could sing.
She placed me on the ground,
I shut my eyes, only to re-open them.
It?s daylight.
I?ve been asleep!
I?ve a deep ache inside me.
I?m alone with no song to sing
Of moonlit dragon wings
Please tell what you think:o
nice, i cudnt hav written sumthin like dat!
Dragonero
10-24-2005, 10:56 AM
good!!!!!!!!!! you know, when i feel depressed poems are my thing, when im happy the words dont come thoguh. bo who nows why?
i spose emotions can trigger things inside u. *shrugs*
Demondragon
10-24-2005, 12:43 PM
That's very nice. You have a great way with words!
thanx! i like writin, and ur compliment is MUCH appreciated! :D
Chakahlah
10-24-2005, 08:18 PM
Ta, from both of you,
Rez3, You probably could write something like that, you know. You are good with words.
Dragonero, thanx for that, I thought I was one of the only people to write things better when depressed. You really do not know how much it means to know that others are like that too.
Thankyou thankyou, thankyou
thanx 4 ur praise, Chakhlah. Much appreciated. :D
Chakahlah
10-25-2005, 06:55 PM
Ur very welcome, Rez3. Us writers gotta stick together on occations. It must be that we don't think our ideas are good, but to others they are, or sumting like that;) :D
always have faith in your abilities, its just that i dont usually write poems. ive been thinking of a song in my head, a depressing one. i tend to be better at depressing songs. ;)
im also writing a story at the mo. Its 30 A4 pages at the minute, but i have not finished yet. i love writing and drawing. those are my talents and passions.
Chakahlah
10-27-2005, 07:35 AM
My passions are reading and writing. I finished a short story about three years ago, I wrote another short story about a week ago, and have started planning for several novel-length stories.
I seem to like writing stories which are either depressing, or they make the people who read them cry. I had two teachers, my grandmother, one of my cousins, one of my aunts and three of my friends at school in tears after they read the first short story. I don't know how I did it, but I decided not to get anyone else to read it after a male teacher read it and started to cry. That was a bit awkward.
I also don't write poetry real good unless I have to put emotion onto paper
Chakahlah
11-06-2005, 07:25 PM
Here's two more poems for ya's
Dragon hunter with wings of steel.
Take me, I pray thee, far from here.
Wither we go, I leaveth to you
Spirits are shattered, dreams demolished
Hope no longer exists.
I feel safe only in the the cage that is your claws.
Will I be eaten? Or be allowed to live?
It no longer matters.
So dragon hunter with wings of steel,
Take me, I pray thee far from here.
The dragon is my master.
Where he goes, I will follow.
Be not deceived by my weak appearance, my Master has made me great!
No mortal can defeat me while I hold to the truth.
I am not worthless.
I was chosen to serve, and not they.
My Master protects me from physical harm,
His training of my mind sheilds my inner self.
I need not be afraed while my Master is near.
All who see him are terrified.
His eyes like deep, deep black pools, revealing his rage.
My Master is powerful, beyohd words.
I shall serve him till my dying day.
Demondragon
11-07-2005, 11:40 AM
Wow, Chak! Your poetry is fantastic!
How long did it take you to write them?
Draconis Infernvs
11-07-2005, 11:46 AM
that hit home.... Master, how it describes him so....
Chakahlah
11-07-2005, 04:20 PM
Wow, Chak! Your poetry is fantastic!
How long did it take you to write them?
The first one took me all day to write because I couldn't get the words to sound right to myself until I went for a really long walk and a swim.
The second one only took me half an hour to write because someone I'm staying with at the moment hurt me real bad and I wasn't going to give him the satisfaction of seeing me cry. It works when you repeat it over and over.:o
Chakahlah
11-07-2005, 04:21 PM
that hit home.... Master, how it describes him so....
It does describe him doesn't it.
Chakahlah
11-07-2005, 04:22 PM
It does describe him doesn't it.
Or dragons in general anyway. You all are in the position to be Masters or Mistresses of the human race if you can find someone willing
Chakahlah
11-20-2005, 06:16 AM
The day has passed
And night has come.
Though tomorrow may
Dawn bright for some.
I'll be in darkness from her after,
Hiding from every small disaster.
The sun has set for me,
But dawned for another.
I was once needed, now hidden.
Someone has taken my place.
Threat them with care.
If not I'll be there to help
You get on track
Before I hide from the sun once more
<smiles sadly at past memories>
RedDragon5
11-20-2005, 08:11 AM
Very good! I thought of a little something if you want to here it.
Chakahlah
11-21-2005, 10:51 PM
Very good! I thought of a little something if you want to here it.
Yes! Put it on. Go on.:)
RedDragon5
11-22-2005, 09:42 AM
Ok, it's just something I thought of right off the top of my head.
Dragons are red, dragons are blue, dragons can fly and breath fire too.
SASMEDRAAD of the Farash
11-22-2005, 11:04 AM
lol good one got any more good ones? um just thought of this one
dragons can fly though they cant swim between you and a dragon guess who would win?
RedDragon5
11-22-2005, 11:11 AM
I thought of that one when I woke up at 5:00 in the morning and I just thought of it.
blackheart3
11-22-2005, 02:27 PM
Ok, it's just something I thought of right off the top of my head.
Dragons are big, dragons are huge, dragons can fall and breath fire on you.
:Dhope you dont mind I edited it a bit.
dragons can fly though they cant swim between you and a dragon guess who would win?
Me!
SASMEDRAAD of the Farash
11-22-2005, 02:32 PM
very funny!!!! are you a dragon as well? to fight against a brother would be a terrible crime though
blackheart3
11-22-2005, 02:34 PM
yes I am a dragon but I would not fight aganst another unless there was no other resonable way but you didnt ask if Id like to fight you asked if I did fight.
SASMEDRAAD of the Farash
11-22-2005, 02:59 PM
indeed. well said only in dire straits should a dragon fight another. i was a ctualy meaning a human was fighting the dragon we can all guess who would win
Blaze
11-25-2005, 02:57 PM
The sweeping wings
sky of blue that hold my dreams
so close and yet so far
my wings spread
to shake loose the dust
and with one sweep
of my great wings i soar
at my side, my one true love
whos beating is in sync with mine
together we fly
in the light of the sun
until it starts to set
we glide a breath above the ground
then slowly stop our wings
reteating back behind us
as we curl about each other
and drift off again
Demondragon
11-25-2005, 10:41 PM
The sweeping wings
sky of blue that hold my dreams
so close and yet so far
my wings spread
to shake loose the dust
and with one sweep
of my great wings i soar
at my side, my one true love
whos beating is in sync with mine
together we fly
in the light of the sun
until it starts to set
we glide a breath above the ground
then slowly stop our wings
reteating back behind us
as we curl about each other
and drift off again
Wow...that's beautiful, Blaze.
Blaze
11-27-2005, 01:40 PM
ta lol
took me awhile though...
im good at writing but i never get the time to do it...
:(
blackheart3
11-27-2005, 04:17 PM
ta lol
took me awhile though...
im good at writing but i never get the time to do it...
:(
umm dont mean to be rude but how long does it take you
Blaze
11-30-2005, 02:39 PM
for that about em...20 mins.
cause i didnt know what to write all i knew was that was what i wanted to do.
for writing my books well....lets just say i wont be done anytime soon...
:o
Demondragon
11-30-2005, 10:48 PM
...i don't think it matters how long it takes you to write the poem...or story...or whatever it is....Only the end result matters.
...you did an excellent job on that poem, blaze....Really.
Chakahlah
12-01-2005, 06:57 PM
Ok, it's just something I thought of right off the top of my head.
Dragons are red, dragons are blue, dragons can fly and breath fire too.
Cute. Funny to.:D
Chakahlah
12-01-2005, 06:58 PM
lol good one got any more good ones? um just thought of this one
dragons can fly though they cant swim between you and a dragon guess who would win?
I like it. My money would be on the dragon for sure;)
Chakahlah
12-01-2005, 07:01 PM
The sweeping wings
sky of blue that hold my dreams
so close and yet so far
my wings spread
to shake loose the dust
and with one sweep
of my great wings i soar
at my side, my one true love
whos beating is in sync with mine
together we fly
in the light of the sun
until it starts to set
we glide a breath above the ground
then slowly stop our wings
reteating back behind us
as we curl about each other
and drift off again
:eek: (I don't mean that as eek by the way. I mean it in astonishment. It is the closest one to that expression.)
That great Blaze
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