bow your heads

[vincent darkheart]

bow your heads

these are the times for remorse
in the game of life we will all be ended
but then why be here, of course
we wouldnt be here for it either
i cannot tell how much weve fought
really i know some do neither
im so lost in these thoughts
i cant fel who is real
ever able to feel
no longer i can stand
how we all can die
in this world of life and play
its so depressing
how everyone is just bleeding
never feeling

thank you for al comments i need criticism of course be brutal

[Stranger In Black]

vincent darkheart- it's nice, I like it. Just perhaps concider the rhythm, and beats per line. Heh.. I always say that don't I?!

[vincent darkheart]

thank you very much

[Rez3]

Nice poem...

[vincent darkheart]

again thank you